‘While these specialties are all very different, they each draw my attention because of [something that works for you]. I think that because I like the field so much, I would be willing to work harder to reach my goal. [or I would not refrain from working hard to reach my goal.]‘

add a few more sentences using your brain. good luck.

I belive that the Buisness Administration field an excellent field for aspiring managers. It comes with a nice salary and I can work with people, and numbers. I love these the most.

Hope i helped.

thats not an intro ,more of a body paraghraph. in your intro you should discuss what your going to wite about in the next four paraghraphs. like” i tooked a great interst in blaaah bllahh …… do to …… , …… ,… but esspecialyy …….. no clue for a conclusion but dont ended by saying” in conclusion….” thats so middle school.

The buisness administration is a great place for me to work at. I can say that this is one of the best jobs. Thanks!